Being Lonely

Where are you hiding?
In this crowded situation
you feel like sucked in the emptiness
You know that you are there
But you feel like nowhere
You know that there is everyone
But you feel like none
You know that there is sound
But you feel like silent
You know there is something
But you feel like empty
Hell when you can’t avoid it
This lonelines,
So cold
So clueless

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Writer sanssouci89
sanssouci89 at Being Lonely (12 years 16 weeks ago)
70

Rimanya dapet. Bs nangkap maksudnya.Tp grammarnya?

Writer yosi_hsn
yosi_hsn at Being Lonely (12 years 16 weeks ago)

You're right. Indeed i was bad in grammar that time.

Writer bogi_everest
bogi_everest at Being Lonely (12 years 37 weeks ago)

Why sould be woory with those Loneliness?
if there was a something that they're saying to you...
it's look like a kind of an abstract face, but will make your heart knows that without that loneliness, you won't find a revelation....

Writer Rijon
Rijon at Being Lonely (13 years 29 weeks ago)
80

Grammarnya mungkin, pertanyaan awal mbak yosi pake present contiunous, tapi dibawahnya tiba-tiba past tense?? Itu mungkin ya??

Sisanya bagus sih, kurang lebih aku bisa mengerti maknanya!!

Writer Ateng
Ateng at Being Lonely (13 years 33 weeks ago)
50

Being Lonely is very-very Natural,as The human Being and so cool,but I'am Feel your think it's same,do you agree?ok it's the Great Job.

Writer Eagle Eye
Eagle Eye at Being Lonely (13 years 35 weeks ago)
50

dont be sad but.....loneliness its beatiful

Writer hasnankh
hasnankh at Being Lonely (13 years 42 weeks ago)
100

i think it's same as what I feel now

Writer prince-adi
prince-adi at Being Lonely (13 years 43 weeks ago)
70

sejujurnya aku ga ngerti tatanan kata puisi dalam bahasa Inggris

Writer ni2nkdesu
ni2nkdesu at Being Lonely (13 years 43 weeks ago)
50

ba, sorrownya nyampe nih ke aq

Writer yugi_yakuza
yugi_yakuza at Being Lonely (13 years 45 weeks ago)
80

Bu, aku cuma bisa kometar duank, cos gak ngatri englishnya...
:D

syair yang manis (kayak diriku^^) dan pesennya pun nyampe Bu,,
pokok'e,,maknyuuuzzz !!
:)

Writer balthazor66
balthazor66 at Being Lonely (13 years 46 weeks ago)
40

keren juga.. some minor grammar errors here and there, tapi overall "pesan"nya cukup nyampe koq.. keep writing! hehehehe.. x)

Writer sheiLa
sheiLa at Being Lonely (13 years 48 weeks ago)
80

seh...
okey...

Writer Blaze_Fire
Blaze_Fire at Being Lonely (13 years 49 weeks ago)
90

feeling of emptyness, I know it somehow

Writer starof hope
starof hope at Being Lonely (13 years 50 weeks ago)
90

wow,, padat tapi enak dibaca..

Writer moesafeer
moesafeer at Being Lonely (13 years 50 weeks ago)
100

Nice poem, Sist.
Sekedar usul :
- Pada baris ke-7, kata terakhir mungkin lebih enak diganti "noone"
- Pada baris ke-11, kata trakhir mungkin lebih enak diganti dg kata "nothing"
But, aniway, tu cuma saran kok. :D

Writer OrangMalas
OrangMalas at Being Lonely (13 years 50 weeks ago)
70

Padat berisi, montok jadinya ya Bang?..
heheh. swe7. :D

Regards,

Writer ijazah_sd
ijazah_sd at Being Lonely (13 years 50 weeks ago)
80

Satu kelebihan english poem adalah kata yang padat.